“The break is surrounded by bullet holes.”
turns to;
“Bullet holes surround the break.”
Cleaner, more direct. A better read. Easy as makin’ pancakes. ▪
About the Author —
Nick Macari is a full-time freelance story consultant, developmental editor and writer, working primarily in the independent gaming and comic markets. His first published comic appeared on shelves via Diamond in the late 90’s. Today you can find his comic work on comixology, amazon and in select stores around the U.S. Visit NickMacari.com for social media contacts and news on his latest releases.